Major mistakes in his letter to a Russian student

Below are the main errors in the statement of purpose of the Russian-speaking students enrolling in foreign universities.

Illogical and inconsistent structure

The style and structure of presentation in the Russian language differ from British standards. Russian-speaking people often build their narrative, sketching the overall picture, rather than consistently presenting arguments and tying them neatly.
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The presence of repetitions and unnecessary words

Many of the works are rife with repetition. No need to present a lot of minor information. If you think that You began to delve into unnecessary details, – take a break, and then with new forces and fresh head start for the letter.

The lack of sincere personal information

Many students start writing essays in the foreign University, not finding the most important and uniquely personal answers to the questions of the essay that makes the essay boring and mediocre at times.
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Overly-florid writing style

If You are not sure of the correct construction of complex sentences, make sure that the verb follows the subject, and use short and simple phrases. Do not write in a complicated and flowery style, using abstruse words and expressions. The contents of Your letter may suffer from the fact that You use words and expressions that are found in the dictionary especially for this reason, the meaning of which You do not understand.

Which of the examples below You would include in a motivational essay?

a) Objective consideration of concrete evidence compelled me to realise the phenomenon was not unprecedented.
b) I realised this often happened.

The correct answer is b:-). A good presentation is a simple and concise presentation, especially when there are restrictions on the amount of words in the text.

The quality of the written text reflects the quality of thinking of the author. Show that You know how to clearly Express their thoughts. Use words the meaning of which You know to be understood by a reviewer. To find weaknesses in the body of the essay, read it out loud.

Insufficiently reasoned statements

Persuasive argument in essay is the key to success. Below are some of the reasons named by the selection committees of the British universities, for which applications were rejected by British universities last year:

"An essay is not enough confirms the desire of the candidate to study in the chosen program; this program is the high level of competition and motivation letter and the experience of other candidates this year was more convincing".

"The essay did not reflect sufficient understanding of the course and the Candidate's conformity to its requirements; the Candidate has failed to demonstrate sufficient knowledge and interest in the subject in his motivational essay".

"Application for admission (including motivation letter, recommendations, and previous education) did not reflect sufficient understanding of the subject and motivation to study it further".
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Literal translation from Russian to English

The literal translation from Russian into English, which, alas, is often present in the works of the students, immediately betrays a lack of knowledge of the lexical revs of the English language and complicates the perception, making the text heavy and, often, insufficiently literate.

Copying other people's motivational essays

Anti-Plagiarism system checks the essay for each incoming student. Motivational letter must be written independently. All job applicants are tested for similarity, revealing essays, copied from the same source.

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